Thank you for being brave! Speaking directly to the camera works powerfully in service to your story.

The nail polish and use of your hands felt brilliant! I have never seen something like that before. It grabbed my attention and it worked effectively. I hope that you keep this as you move forward.

Overall, the video is long, and I think that you could cut the part about randomness and the undesirability of perfection. This part felt "preachy." As soon as you shifted into "So what have I done? I told one friend, and then another, and then . .. " my attention picked up and I felt connected to you again.

At the end, perhaps you could show a link to a guide to educating others about herpes? Maybe there are people with herpes who have not been as proactive as you in learning about their own condition and could use some help with explaining it to others?

I wish you continued courage as you complete your dissertation and share your story.

Thank you for sharing the video and asking for my opinion. I thought it was amazing that your words kept flowing and you managed to speak for nearly 8 minutes in a onetake video (!) I have watched it a few times now and in an attempt to find some small things that could improve the video further, here are my suggestions:

Body language: The eye contact was focused on one spot, it looked better when you moved the gaze away sometimes, like looking slightly away, looking down and then coming back to the camera. Also, sometimes the walking back and forward became a little distracting. I do think it's better to be standing and moving instead of sitting, but try a little less movement and see how that works. You are moving your hands well, but I think you could bring even more impact by also using your hands (and voice) to underline your message when you say that you don't let anyone make bad comments or shame you.

Tone and voice: It became a bit monotonous sometimes in the first half, the 2nd half was more lively. I liked the parts where you showed emotion, like smiling. Would it be helpful to have someone behind the camera for a more interactive vibe? Given the sensitive topic, personally I would've expected to see a bit more emotion, not necessarily sadness, but anything you went through emotionally when you speak about when you first found out.

Outfit: I really like the bright yellow, it works well with the positive message :)

Visual examples: The background is a little distracting with the whiteboard and the tape marks. It should be a neutral background that doesn't steal attention.

Clarity: Perfect!

Content: I really like the content and the nail polish metaphor. I would've liked to hear a bit more about the stigma, how it plays out and maybe an example of it, that would make the story more personal. I like that you mention the two key words early on: randomness and courage, which make up the essence of your message. And I really liked the metaphor with making a fist together and pushing the stigma away (followed by your wonderful smile).

Again, it was a great piece of work. After seeing the video again and again with the aim to give you some constructive feedback for the next round, this is what I could come up with. I hope it helps.

I think it is great how you try to explain the story with the stigma and the virus and how you explain how it affected you. I also really like the end of the movie how you try to motivate other people.

Other comments to body-language:
I feel like you focused too much on the content at the beginning. You are not blinking with your eyes in the beginning and focused too much on the camera. When you walk away from the camera the tone is not as good anymore. You walk away too far and back again. Why do you not try sitting down? If you do the explanation with the stigma and the virus you should also look at your hands sometimes. Otherwiese it is not natural.

Comments to content:
The explanation with your hands and the nail polish is great and really clear